On the day of the pitch I was not in, so obviously didn't hear the feedback given from the teachers. However, my group has kindly send me notes they wrote on the day, so that I'm also aware of what is good about our idea and what we have to think about.
"1) We need to make her look more miserable, she is fed-up, she is angry and what’s to kill him.
She needs to show how angry she is, how upset she is.
Maybe she could be cooking and he is trying to escape in the background, and when she see’s him she goes crazy, very angry, drags him back. She is shouting and screaming.
2) Matt said it is too much of a jump to go from vegetable to cutting up his kidney. If you want the kidney part in it, skip the vegetables.
3) Or you could show that there has been a struggle in the room and the woman has one. You need to show the clear signs of a struggle. Things knocked over, blood stained on the carpet (slip over blood).
4) Don't add too much in to the opening scene as it sounds like you are trying to fit the whole film into the opening.
5) As a group you need to decide if it's a struggle as she has stabbed him or if they are cooking, but I wouldn’t focus too much on the cannibalism.
6) Very good that it is only one location. Stay in kitchen, and a it is a good idea to have her with bruises on her face, cuts on her."
4) Don't add too much in to the opening scene as it sounds like you are trying to fit the whole film into the opening.
5) As a group you need to decide if it's a struggle as she has stabbed him or if they are cooking, but I wouldn’t focus too much on the cannibalism.
6) Very good that it is only one location. Stay in kitchen, and a it is a good idea to have her with bruises on her face, cuts on her."
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